Poetry

The Obscure Moon

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Sparkling shine from the distant moon
transcended her shadow
from a faraway place
reflecting her vivid glow
in the pristine water on a distant lake

And the gentle ripples on the waterbed
quietly oscillated her deviant visage
and slowly it unveiled
much artistry submerged in her vicious chimes
exposing her aberrant smiles
the mystic shades, one at a time

More he tried to decipher
further convoluted it became
robbing away his transient peace
snatching away his balance and rhythm

And as he stretched his hands
to confirm whether she was for real
the moon hid behind the grays
leaving his anxious soul
in an absolute dismay

Copyright © Shantanu Baruah

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34 thoughts on “The Obscure Moon”

  2. Very nice as always. Love the imagery of the moon’s glow, the shadow, the lake and its ripples, and the impact it all has on the third person voice of your poem. Water is usually a symbol and a metaphor of our emotions and feelings. Also, I usually enjoy out-of-body poems like this one. I mean by that poems not always written in the first person “I”. You succeed in doing this here. It makes the poem less personal, but equally lovely and touching. Loved it!

  7. Your analysis and the way you describe my poem makes my work appear more beautiful. Thank you for such lovely comment. I will sure treasure it ❤️

  13. You have painted the beautiful imagery of the moonlight reflected on water and it’s ripples.A beautiful metaphor of people’s reflection in our lives .Loved reading this one.

  26. You are welcome. So glad you like my analysis. I love to review poetry. My last post is a review of a book written by a friend of mine, Mario Savioni. He is a great poet who often talks about love relationships, especially about infatuation and unrequited love. I see a few similarities with some poem of yours I read. Perhaps you may want to have a look? Mario is a very important person in my life. If I had not met him I would not be trying to write poetry, have my blog and come across your beautiful work that always speaks to me. 😊

  28. Thank you too. I am also very glad to have met you in the realm of wordpress.com. Thank you for your time, interest and feedback.

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